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You Save Me Once Again by ~openwound88:iconopenwound88:





i listen to my tears
one by one
they fall in sync with my heart
beat by beat
i watch my life waste away
second by second
my eyes open and close
frame by frame
as i lie there on the floor
step by step
you come closer
inch by inch
until you are next to me
word by word
i fade away,
into the comfort that is you.
©2004-2009 ~openwound88
:iconopenwound88:

Author's Comments

just wrote it... wasnt sure if i should submit it... i dont think its that good.. might change it. its about my best friend.

comment and tell me what you think.

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:iconseraph1013:
I love the style you used. The repetition of words fit perfectly on this wonderfull piece of art.

keep the good work :judge:

--
"Ienakatta sen no kotoba wo kimi no senaka ni okuru yo Tsubasa ni kaete"
:iconopenwound88:
thx. check out my gallery if you get a chance.

--
:jsenn: mena
[sing like you think no one's listening
you would kill for this
just a little bit, just a little bit
you would, you would.]
:iconravenstear:
OMG the repitition makes this so powerful.. I love it..

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"Seduce my mind and you can have my body,
Find my soul and I'm yours forever."
~ by Anonymous ~
As i look through the lock on the chains around my soul i see tears are just the souls way of bleeding-me

Bitter the secret Furie
:iconbrokenxdreamer:
i loved it. the way you did the ___ by ___ after each line. it was amazing =]

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Im lying to myself and this daggers my excuse.
:iconopenwound88:
thx. i like doin something like that every once in awhile.

<3

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:jsenn: mena
[sing like you think no one's listening
you would kill for this
just a little bit, just a little bit
you would, you would.]
:iconopenwound88:
thx for the fav.

<3

--
:jsenn: mena
[sing like you think no one's listening
you would kill for this
just a little bit, just a little bit
you would, you would.]
:iconravenstear:
your welcome

--
"Seduce my mind and you can have my body,
Find my soul and I'm yours forever."
~ by Anonymous ~
As i look through the lock on the chains around my soul i see tears are just the souls way of bleeding-me

Bitter the secret Furie
:iconmasseuse:
The use of libes in this is very well done, and helps the poem stay together well.
I also know what you're on about.

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Somewhere? Let it be.
:iconopenwound88:
thx.

<3

--
:jsenn: mena
[sing like you think no one's listening
you would kill for this
just a little bit, just a little bit
you would, you would.]

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